This storyline in this book was not great, but it was passable. What was not ok was the writing. A number of people referenced the poor editing, but I couldn’t see that the book was edited at all. I wonder if the plethora of books being published online actually go through the classic publishing process, including editing and revision. Having taught over 37 years, 12 of them as a journalism advisor, I am always very conscious of errors in writing. By the seventh chapter, it was clear that the writing in this book was seriously flawed. Others pointed out some of the problems: incorrect usage of their/there/they’re in multiple places (“There doing fine Ms. Murray.” Loc 1226, Olivia straightened up and looked around, realizing there were on a plane. Loc 2242), awkward word usage (Olivia adverted her gaze and refused to look up at him. Loc 2004, They both prattled in between the nun and the security officer and walked out the door. Loc 3846), incorrect or missing punctuation (And that same spark that ignited her brazen temper; was the same one that tended to set his own system ablaze. Loc 4411), run-on sentences, fragments, and on and on. (More examples follow, if space permits.) Some of the writing errors reminded me of writing patterns of some of my non-native English speakers. All in all, this writing was a train wreck, and I couldn’t keep from reading on in hopes that it would improve. Sadly, that did not happen. Ms. Sampson’s writing would greatly improve by using an editor.(Oh, my! I just saw that there is actually an editor's name listed. Incredible.)He put his hands on his hips and widened that knowing gin of his. “Your newlywed’s right?” (Loc 3809)Tip toeing to the bed, he reached over her and carefully grabbed the empty pillow. (Loc 3907)… donned herself with light make up … (Loc 4028)… after she killed the bitch that dared to try and sink her paws into her man. (Loc 4135)“Dam Newlyweds, Get a room,“ he laughingly chucked, remembering when Ashley and he were first married. (Loc 4484) Brody holding onto Olivia’s hand, reveling in the softness of her skin as he led her through the parking lot that would lead them to the beach. (Loc 4577)He eyes widened as he took a minute to fully appreciate his beautiful wife. (Loc 4760)Even after all these years of being with her; she still had this amazing ability to steal his breath away. (Loc 4760)“Please- let me open the door.” (Loc 4801)…panting for more, much… much more. (Loc 4817)Her eyes half lidded as she stared at him, lost in a moment of frenzied passion. (Loc 4829)He was eager to reveal the secrets that were so lavishly hidden from him. (Loc 4829)She wasn’t a complete innocent but she had now where near the experience of Brody … (Loc 4864)… she was cooking something up in that sharp, calculated mind of hers. (Loc 4917)The sooner this is ended- the better off we’ll all be. (Loc 5074)Blinking several times, she looking above her and saw nothing but bright white. (Loc 5405)“I don’t know why you’re here Mr. O’Connor, but I want you to leave- now!” (Loc 5445)He was way to male and way to dangerous in her opinion. (Loc 5483)Chewing on her lip, she aid for the umpteenth time, … (Loc 5556)I can read it in you mannerisms. (Loc 6097)“Oh yeah, this is defiantly going to work.” (Loc 5631)“I hope your right,” … (Loc 5654)The doors opened and what seem like forever was finally here. (Loc 5682)… the bride and groom had just exited the building for a honey moon of their own. (Loc 5756)Those that were left all seemed to be absolved in their own little worlds. (Loc 5766)Both, Brody and Olivia snapped their heads to the side to see a Nun standing three rooms down. (Loc 5912) I liked the story and the way it was developed, but what I don't like are all the typos. "he" was supposed to be "the", "hear" instead of "hair", and that's only the beginning. There is also no clear way of breaking up the parts between the chapters, and it can be confusing sometimes when it throws you into some other characters head right in the middle. Also, there are times when someone will start speaking, but there are no "" to indicate it, or there is only one at either the beginning of the end.The book is rife with mistakes, and detracted from the story too much.All this is something that needs to be changed, and why I only gave it 3 stars. Otherwise, I would have given it 5. That is how much of a down grader it was to encounter these problems. It really detracted from my reading enjoyment.
What do You think about The Rented Husband (2000)?
I'm trying really hard to finish this one but I just can't get into it.
—Pengs151
totally unreadable. I cannot finish it!
—Rebekahkirzhner
